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Beware of Bees

30 Oct

Bee stings

like the sun’s rays

piercing through fresh cut wounds

waiting for the right time to heal.

Heal me.

 
2 Comments

Posted by on October 30, 2012 in Cameo Cinquains

 

2 responses to “Beware of Bees

  1. NaijaBoy

    December 16, 2012 at 11:07 am

    You could have done more with the last line

     
    • memkoh

      December 17, 2012 at 12:06 am

      I agree, it was a very lazy last line. Since it’s a cinquain, the last line should have 2 syllables. What you do suggest?

       

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